the whistle blows,
a mad dash to line up.
standing in postion,
four whistles sound,
drums start their cadences.
as we head up to the stadium.
up ahead the teams are running to the field,
the games starts.
paying no attention,
sitting, waiting for the clock.
three minutes till half time,
as we make our way down the track.
getting ready.
the buzzer sounds,
the field is filling up with our opposition.
they play their numbers,
silently hyping up.
the field is ours,
time to play.
the crowd cheers as we enter.
the light pouring down on us,
creating an illusion of daylight.
when we finish,
the crowd is roaring.
the rush is unexplainable.
whether the team wins or loses,
the game is already won...
Honestly, I really like the imagery you use, but the vagueness of the poem is a little offputting to me. The first time I read it, I thought you were on the team, the second, a cheerleader, the third in colorguard, and the fourth in band. I'm still not quite sure whether it's the third or fourth one. The piece could use just a tad more refinement in the language, to give a hint of which viewpoint we're actually looking from here. Also, and this is more of a personal preference, I would put line breaks in between stanzas. I see three stanzas in there, Commencement (ending with the line the games starts.), Anticipation (ending with the line silently hyping up.), and Conclusion. Putting a line break in the form of an extra space between the lines would make the piece flow a little better, and make it a little easier to read.
i'll work on that, again thankyou very much!
And my husband is a stupid trumpet player. Them uppity brass instruments need to get what's coming to them.